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So excruciating is this feeling,
The one that hurts me within,
Its hard to explain the burning,
Feels like fire underneath my skin.

I wonder why I feel lost,
In the catacombs of my mind,
Never know what's round the corner,
Gotta care for the body that is blind.

My skin it is like paper,
So delicate and fragile to care,
But living in such a dangerous city,
Every so often you must do a dare.

Why must I live in such agony,
Is my thought to a crimson stain,
Why can't my mind just begone,
This livin' it brings me such pain.
©2004-2009 ~Zelleon
:iconzelleon:

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Free-style.. describing the feel of pain... or sumthin like that

All parts of this deviation belong to myself Zak. B (Zelleon)

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:iconlastplaceaaf:
good good. describes it perfectolay!

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*~Hilary~*
Remember all the times that we used to play? You were lost and I would save you.
I don't think those feelings will ever change. You were born a part of me.
:iconzelleon:
yay :w00t: :hug: :glomp:.. thanks luv :D

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One life; Win or lose it's all on a bet
One chance; Don't show fear and do not forget

"Zealous in my mind
And blind to see
That this world is revolving
Chronologically
"

110705
:iconlastplaceaaf:
Haha, :giggle: you're welcome bud! :wave:

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*~Hilary~*
Remember all the times that we used to play? You were lost and I would save you.
I don't think those feelings will ever change. You were born a part of me.
:iconzelleon:
:blush:.. thankies :D

--
One life; Win or lose it's all on a bet
One chance; Don't show fear and do not forget

"Zealous in my mind
And blind to see
That this world is revolving
Chronologically
"

110705
:iconlastplaceaaf:
no prob, bob! :w00t:

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*~Hilary~*
Remember all the times that we used to play? You were lost and I would save you.
I don't think those feelings will ever change. You were born a part of me.
:iconlenniepoo:
Wow, that's really deep, nice too, it really lets out the feelings of pain, good job :)
:iconraven16:
cool..i really like this one..it kinda explains how i feel..only i haven't stabbed myself

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This Is What You Really Want
:iconkuraikage:
I think this describes the feeling of 'pain' quite well if I say so myself ^_^

The 3rd verse seems... out of rythm (did I spell that right :confused: ?) compared to the other verses... or maybe that's just me >.>

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From now on I'm asexual... except for that whole 'reproducing with myself' part...
:icon13wishes:
nice touch my friend~! conveys the feeling very well...can feel the pain :D

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I'll wave, but my fist is stuck in your face.

Groups: *Comic-Artists, *kingdomhearts
:iconzelleon:
heh heh :D

--
One life; Win or lose it's all on a bet
One chance; Don't show fear and do not forget

"Zealous in my mind
And blind to see
That this world is revolving
Chronologically
"

110705

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